the stick-up kid

sent in my application to the sundance filmmakers lab yesterday. i applied last year as well, with "the 400-pound ceo", but they rejected me. i'm used to it by now.

but this year i applied with "the stick-up kid", and come august we'll see what occurs. the following is my cover letter/synopsis:

“The Stick-Up Kid”
by James Flynn

This is a story about a character named Montgomery Greene. This is a story about Chicago, Illinois. This is a story about jazz music. This is a story about skateboarding. This is a story about a son wanting to be better than his father. This is a story about kissing a girl on a swing set when you first start dating. This is a story about someone who is starved of love and wants fame. This is a story about getting a dog and the process of naming it. This is a story that has an intermission in the middle. This is a story about nice suits. This is a story about the one-sided nature of journalism. This is a story about crime. This is a story about how someone comes to mug someone else. This is a story about a romance that gets betrayed. This is a story about having a baby that you’ve never met. This is a story about going to prison. This is a story about how life moves in cycles. This is a story about playing the saxophone, alone in a room.

This story was influenced by music. This story was influenced by Art Pepper. This story was influenced by Miles Davis. This story was influenced by Charlie Parker. This story was influenced by Big L. This story was influenced by Biggie Smalls. This story was influenced by Jay-Z. This story was influenced by Nas. This story was influenced by the Wrens. This story was influenced by Lemmy Klimister.

This story was influenced by films. This story was influenced by Citizen Kane. This story was influenced by Goodfellas. This story was influenced by American Pimp. This story was influenced by Boogie Nights. This story was influenced by Hana-bi. This story was influenced by Pickpocket. This story was influenced by Serpico. This story was influenced a short film I made in college called 10 Months.

This story was influenced by books. This story was influenced by “Paul’s Case” by Willa Cather. This story was influenced by “Sonny’s Blues” by James Baldwin. This story was influenced by Soul on Ice by Eldridge Cleaver. This story was influenced by Jones, Portrait of a Mugger by James Willwerth.

This story was written to better understand my father, Charles Paul Cornelius Flynn. This story was written to better understand by brother, Joe Flynn.

This is a story I would like to direct myself. This is a story that I want to inspire actors to do their best job. This is a story I want to find a producer for. This is a story I want to workshop. This is a story I want to rehearse. This is a story I want to shoot for five million dollars or so. This is a story that would look good in anamorphic. This is a story that I want someone else to edit. This is a story where the main color scheme is green. This is a story that must be shot on location. This is a story that must be shot in Chicago.

This is a story that I have been burning to tell for a long time.

This is a long story.

i was going for: sincere, mysterious, leaving them wanting more.

what do you think?